Sang's Comment on Revision 4

Good! Much better than the last revision. Now there a couple of things to be revised:

1. You did not implement this comment: (The background of the Kimberly is too small. You haven’t sufficiently discussed the process itself. Add more!)

2. You worked hard to work APA style, but you still need to check your citations according to APA style. I found a few errors on this paper.

3. You need to revise the conclusion.:a) provide a summary of the paper then b) you will continue the current conclusion.

4. After you work on the above, you will work with your writing tutor and upload the reflection on the research project. Let's talk about your thesis tomorrow and the class schedule for the rest of this semester.