Song Hee, you are the only student who uploaded the 2nd.3rd version. So this feedback was based on your 3rd revision.
Your statement is very interesting and well written.
Some comments:
Think about a good title.
In the beginning part of this statement, you spent too much space for describing biological information. Reduce that part. Can you add more sort of your own definition of art somewhere in this statement?
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